All papers are in PDF format. I've also commented on these papers using
Acrobat's "sticky note" feature. When you see  ,
double click to see the text of the note. You may need an updated version
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Also, before you download or view any of these papers, keep in mind that
plagiarism will not be tolerated. You might want to review the Writing
Program's Plagiarism
Policy.
Paper One:
- Problems Working with Text: This
paper actually has many of the basic elements of this course in play,
including work with text and a project. But it is also a good example
of a problem I saw repeatedly in the first paper: losing the sense of
a quotation as you work with text. I saw people dropping out an author
again and again, and if you're not able to recognize this in your own
work, take a look at this paper and then go back and look at what you
do.
- Transitions: A lot of people had
very weak organization, often indicated by weak (or no) transitions
between paragraphs. This paper, like the first, has a lot of our essential
elements at play, but it's particularly good with transitions. This
would be a good paper to look at to see what a good transition looks
like and to figure out what makes it good.
- Introductions: This paper has
a really nice, really solid introduction. A few of you had very choppy
or brief or underdeveloped introductions, so you may want to take a
look at this one. Others had this sudden jump from the Roadmap to Boyarin;
you, too, should take a look here. I not only commented on this introduction,
but I indicated a few textual corrections as well. Double-click the
line-through or blue carat (^) to see what the error is and why it is
an error.
- Interesting Work with Text:
Take a look at the highlighted section on p.4 of this paper. The sticky
note has my actual comments from when I graded. The section is an interesting
use of text--one that could be stronger, but also one with some strength
and a lot of promise.
- General Sample Paper: This
is a very solid paper overall. I've included my end comments in a sticky
note at the end. You can see that while the paper is strong, it also
has some of the same issues seen above and found in just about everyone's
paper.
Paper Two:
- Solid Work: This is a solid
paper, particularly in light of the problems everyone had with this
assignment. Pay attention, in particular, to the infrastructure: the
project and the organization. It keeps things very clear which helps
a LOT.
Paper Three:
- More of the Same: This is a
great sample paper because it shows one of you beginning to really do
all we've been talking about in class lately. Notice how the project
is clear and suggests the orgnization. Notice, too, how the paragraphs
are idea focused, though some transitions and a more complex project
would have made an even stronger paper.
Paper Four:
- More of More: This sample paper
has particularly strong transitions, that work as transitions, maintain
an idea focus, and give a logical progression to the project. Excellent!
Computer Classroom Work on Gladwell:
- Connective Thinking: Here are
the group paragraphs we worked on in the computer classroom, with my
comments. Review these for help in refining your skills in working with
text and showing connective thinking in your paragraphs.
Papers Five and Six:
- Rather than detailing papers five
and six here, I present them
as examples of particularly strong and solid work and as evidence of
what this class was able to achieve this semester.
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